Again with the hat, on p. 36, Will observes:
Outside, getting into the taxi with no hat, I felt cold and exposed. The day had become brighter, but no less damp, and the clouds persisted. The Christmas lights smiled at me on the way over. I asked them why they had to be do damned cheerful.A decidedly grumpy Will, nothing is going well for him. He can't find the key. He's stuck feeling exposed from his situation. He wants to go home to Julie. He doesn't want Henry to find out what he's been up to. Poor boy.
This part doesn't come from me. I don't know where he got it from. These characters, like your adult children, are taking on lives of their own.
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