Sometimes you just have to let the story run. In basketball, it's analogous to dribbling the ball down the court rather than passing it.
After we got done characterizing Ben on p. 37, the story starts to speed up. Henry has just said good by to Ben. Here's how it went:
Ben looked up at Henry. "Mr. Harrier?"Detail, but the reader doesn't see it.
Ben moved his hands faster. "I saw that thing."
"What thing, Ben?"
"Where Mr. Kearney fell on his head."
Henry bent closer to Ben. "You saw Ian Kearney fall off the balcony?"
Ben described Ian's fall in exact detail."
Characterizing slows down the pace of the story. So you have to think about what the story needs. How fast does the story need to go. Don't slow down when it needs to run fast.
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